Mar 15, 2011

Action Scenes

by Terri Wagner

In my for fun writing (and I hope all of you have for fun writing), I am envisioning this action scene. It's a cute little romantic encounter at a party wherein our intrepid heroine will fall into the arms of her future husband. And I mean literally.

The scene is set on a beach, dancing on a sandy floor, tables groaning with food and drinks, lots of people getting to know one another, typical YSA activity when I was YSA.

On the horizon a terrific storm is brewing and sweeps inland. The hero is struggling to get the Chinese lanterns tucked away before the storm hits full on. The heroine is walking slowly back to the beach house after spending sometime reveling in the coming storm thinking pirate princess.

An erstwhile young man who only fancies himself in love with our heroine sprints across the sand to "save" her from the coming rain. He trips on a sandal and barrels into her.

Now comes the big problem. How do I get the heroine thrown into the hero along with Chinese lanterns, electric tingles and gusty rain? Somehow I see it but I can't seem to detail it.

Any ideas?


  1. This sounds like a fun scene! I'm seeing it as a kind of domino effect. The first guy trips into her, sends her flying into the second guy. Maybe the poor victim hears running footsteps and turns, just to see her flying straight at him with a horrified look on her face. He doesn't want to drop his armload, but at the same time he's hesitant to let her land on the ground, so he fumbles and juggles the Chinese lanterns while trying to keep her upright. And then maybe the poor clumsy guy who tripped over the sandal ends up with his face in the sand. Hee hee

  2. I agree with Kristin. Hero only has time to drop lanterns, catch girl and cushion his own and her fall. There she is in his arms and either standing or I picture him on his butt with her spralled it what ever way you think she would fall with his arms around her. Sounds fun.

  3. Thx. I'm using your actions for my scene.

  4. Terri,
    The book I wrote about,"Fireside," has a similar scene. The female character is on one of those airport escalators that carry people along long spaces between gates. Her heel gets caught in the escalator (escalator is probably not the right term, but if not, I know you know what I mean). The male, who is seeing her for the first time, but is mightily attracted to her, sees she is in trouble, and gets to her just in time. The night before she had broken up with another guy, so she was in no mood to make a new acquaintence.

  5. I don't have a suggestion, but I did want to say the set up to your scene sounds great. I can't wait to read it when you get it finished.


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